The Bad Impacts of Globalization for Indonesia
Globalization is a spreading process of a certain value or culture to all over the world so became a world culture. It grows intensively in the begin of the 20th century along with the developing of information and communication technology. Globalization brings many effect for the world countries. In Indonesia, it gives some bad impacts in the culture and economic conditions.
One of the bad impact of the globalization is the interference of foreign culture to Indonesian culture. This matter caused Indonesian people’s life style has been changing. For example, their get dressed ways. Formerly, the get dressed way of Indonesian people were well behave. But, nowday many Indonesian people wear no well behave clothes, especially the girls. They like wearing the minimize clothes and not shame to show their body.
In economic conditions, globalization makes Indonesian people suffer grave economic conditions. The economy market is under the control of no authority. Since Indonesia be a developing country, it runs on bureaucracy making things difficult. A lot of corruption, collution, and nepotism make the economy and country weak. Economic crises have led the common people suffer. Though with resources, Indonesia has a lot of import. To solve this problem, Indonesia has resorted loans from the IMF, to pay some private debts and to stabilize the Rupiah.
According to the essay, globalization gives some bad impacts for Indonesian culture and economic condition. Besides that, it changes the Indonesian society's life.
One of the bad impact of the globalization is the interference of foreign culture to Indonesian culture. This matter caused Indonesian people’s life style has been changing. For example, their get dressed ways. Formerly, the get dressed way of Indonesian people were well behave. But, nowday many Indonesian people wear no well behave clothes, especially the girls. They like wearing the minimize clothes and not shame to show their body.
In economic conditions, globalization makes Indonesian people suffer grave economic conditions. The economy market is under the control of no authority. Since Indonesia be a developing country, it runs on bureaucracy making things difficult. A lot of corruption, collution, and nepotism make the economy and country weak. Economic crises have led the common people suffer. Though with resources, Indonesia has a lot of import. To solve this problem, Indonesia has resorted loans from the IMF, to pay some private debts and to stabilize the Rupiah.
According to the essay, globalization gives some bad impacts for Indonesian culture and economic condition. Besides that, it changes the Indonesian society's life.
7 komentar:
Anak Agung Ngurah Bagus Trihatmaja-5109100040-kelas 10.
first, the thesis statement is clear, but there is not verb in your thesis statement(that is just a subject)
the body paragraph is well enough developed. It has well explanation about the thesis paragraph.
In my humble opinion, the conclusion is lacks of relationship tat show te thesis statement. Maybe it can develope more than yours...
I wont comment about your grmmar.. your grammar is well. Maybe one or two mistake can be accepted..
I think thats what i can give for you.. Everyone makes a mistake, so do I but your job is a very nice job for me..
siti nurhayati, 3309100040, kelas 10
the links between one paragraph with another paragraph was good and his grammar easily understood by readers.
thank you for the comments, take some of the good points from your friends' remark. i agree that you need to be careful to develop paragraph by paragraph, they should show a coherency, say for instance, in the first body paragraph, better if you start with something you have mentioned in the Thesis statement. you can start with topic sentence: one of the back impact of the globalization is the interference of foreign culture to our culture.
Any how, you have done your best keep writing and keep progressing... be careful with your grammar...reread the draft before you really want to pen off to check the grammar.
another thing i like from this essay is the formal style that has already reflect the style of academic writing.
murti sari amalia-3309100085
howdy! i think your blog is very cute. how'd you get that? well, that's just a question.
well, about your essay. i think is great. your thesis statement is really clear and the explanation develop it well. the conclusion does his job perfectly. well done.
but i found some mistake. "It grow..." should be "it grows...". and, in the "Indonesian people's life style changed" sentence, why don't you use "Indonesia people's life style has been changing"? i guess it's better than the first. besides, it's an event that happens in the past until now, right?
and then about your writing, i really enjoy it. keep practice, okay? so you'll improve yourself a lot.
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good luck!
Thanks for the comment and the correction.. It will help me to be better.
I'll fix the mistakes in my article, and I will try to make it even better.. :)
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I think your blog and your essay is interesting. Your thesis statement and conclusion is so clearly.
But I find A mistake.
(line 5), One of the bad impact of ... --> One of the bad impacts of ..
GOOD JOB
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